Showing posts with label kill your darlings. Show all posts
Showing posts with label kill your darlings. Show all posts

Deleted Darlings, do you want to share any of yours?  Here are three of mine.  I'd like company out here parading my purple prose before an audience.

Sinners Opera from the heroine’s (Isabeau) POV: The color of the eyes didn’t matter. The face, in its breathtaking beauty didn’t matter. It was the shock she felt as she recognized the male side of herself—or perhaps herself stripped of gender and reduced to the essence her own being—staring back at her with blind, knowing eyes. And then the image shifted and she saw herself, wide-eyed, mouth agape, before a rocket of sensation shot from her head to toe.


Cardinal Desires, another vampire paranormal which I have just contracted with Double Dragon Publishing, Inc. for release next year:  From the heroine Katy’s POV about the hero Sterling Fox:  Why did boys either love or hate their mothers? No grey—black or white—the driving force behind how they perceived the world. Particularly influential in their relationships with women. She and Sterling were alike. Childhood had marked them both. Katie carried scars from a cruel senseless act of violence; he from cruelty and the violence of loneliness.

Beats me??:  Have you ever faced yourself in the mirror? And your reflection was a stranger? She gazed into the looking glass and saw another face, not her own, but a man’s face, strong boned but elegant and beautiful. But behind the eyes, their souls met. And it seemed lightning arced across the sky as blue eyes met eyes of sheerest gold—unreal and real as the faceted metallic jewelry that adorned the Christmas store fronts.





Snippets.


How many pieces of stories, individual sentences or words do you have lurking in your writing closet? I find these little jewels sometimes and wonder to which, if any, novel or short they belonged. I’m going to share some of these little fragments in this post and would love for you to share yours in the comments. It will be so interesting to see what was born but never grew into anything!

First snippet—I know not where: Why did they laugh when they wanted to cry? Why not tell each other the horrible things that had happened in the winters, springs and summers since they parted?

A short poem I wrote for my first web site, now abandoned for the newer version http://www.lindanightingale.com/:


Do not trust what your ears hear
Or what your eyes may see
The taste on your lips may lie.
Here things are not what they seem.
So you may speak your mind clearly
But must be warned that
We may not understand or
Yet choose to reply….The Others

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This I know is from Sinners’ Opera, my vampire paranormal and is from the hero’s (Morgan) POV:  I am beautiful. This is not vanity, but a statement of fact merely. And beauty is power. I am also wealthy. Another statement of power. And yet with all this, I cannot have the thing I want most. I can’t buy it. I can’t seduce it with my charm, aristocratic breeding or command it to me with the power of beauty. There are other dark powers I could use to bind love to me. But I refuse to use them on her. I want her to love me, the real me, and so I ask you, Ladies, would you shun a proposal of marriage from a man who can offer fortune, fame (I am a world-renowned pianist), a title (I am a British lord), power and beauty.

Share your snippets?